네~ 이 문장에서 사용한 As well as는 접속사로 사용이 되었기 때문에 순서가 맞습니다. 여기서 As well as 를 다른 접속사로 변경을 해도 문장이 잘 맞습니다.

The submitted E-Poster will be displayed online as well as the site during the tournament/conference period.

The submitted E-Poster will be exhibited online as well as on-site during the competition.

---답변이 완료된 게시물로 해당 댓글 다음 추가 작성되는 댓글은 삭제 및 포인트 지급이 되지 않습니다.---

My dream is to be a writer. I want to be a novel writer among writers. I'm using chisel to make my dream come true. It's not easy to finish, so I keep giving up on writing in the middle.Still, I am writing down my goal to finish what I am writing this time! Please cheer for me!

I want to be a writer. Especially a novelist. I write little by little to make my dream come true. But I used to give it up because it's hare to finalize writing for me. However I'm trying to finish my writing this time. Please give me support so that I can achieve it. :)

Being a writer is my dream. I want to be a novel writer, especially. I write little by little to make my dream come true. It's not easy to get it done, so I keep giving up on writing in the middle of the work. But, this time, I am writing down to finish my essay as my goal. Please cheer me up!

To be a writer is my dream. Especially, I want to be a novel writer. In order to achieve it, I write my novel little by little.

I want to be a writer when I grow up. To do that, I have been writing little by little. However, in the middle of doing that, I quit it since it is hard for me to wrap it up. Cheer me up.

My dream is to be a writer. Among the writers, I want to be a novel writer the most. I'm using a chisel little by little to achieve my dream. It's easy to finish writing, so I give up writing in the middle.But my goal is to finish what I'm writing this time. Please cheer for me!

---답변이 완료된 게시물로 해당 댓글 다음 추가 작성되는 댓글은 삭제 및 포인트 지급이 되지 않습니다.---

I chose social welfare as my major because when I helped people, people were happy to smile.

I chose social welfare as my major because I was happy to see people smile when I helped them.

I chose social welfare as my major because I was happy to see people smile when I helped them.

I chose social welfare as my major because when I helped people, people were happy to smile

I decided social welfare for my major becuase some people joying when I helped when they need some hand.

I chose my major in social welfare because I feel happy to see people smile when I help them.

I decided to major social welfare since thier smile makes me happy when I help them.

I chose social welfare as my major because I love to see people smile.

I made a decision to major in social welfare because their smile when I help them makes me happy.

I feel happy when people that I gave help look happy. That's why I choose my major social wellfare.

I chose social welfare as my major because I was happy when people laughed when I helped them.

---답변이 완료된 게시물로 해당 댓글 다음 추가 작성되는 댓글은 삭제 및 포인트 지급이 되지 않습니다.---

We started a discount event on our website yesterday. But the server went down because there were too many people. I had to work overtime until 2 a.m. to deal with it. We're still waiting for the unstable server.

A discount event started on our site yesterday, but the server knocked down because of lots of people who got on the site. I was forced to work till 2 A.M. to solve the problem. Now I'm on standby since the server has been unstable.

We began a discount event on our website yesterday. But the server was shut down because there were too many people. I had to work overtime until 2 a.m. to deal with it. We're still waiting for the unstable server.

Our company started a big-discount event since yesterday. So many customers piled to our website that the system was shut down. That’s why I had to do extra work yesterday. The problem still remains, so I have to stay alert.

We started a discount event on our site yesterday. But the server went down because there were so many users. I had to work overtime until 2 a.m. to deal with it. The server is unstable right now, so I'm waiting.

---답변이 완료된 게시물로 해당 댓글 다음 추가 작성되는 댓글은 삭제 및 포인트 지급이 되지 않습니다.---

I was playing the Kart Rider game, and it was good to meet Hyung-Dok, but I kept banging it and came out of the room. And then Moon Ho-Jun came out of the room and played the game, and I turned off the monitor and slept on the bed. I was in my dream, and Hyung-Dok and Moon Ho-joong were annoyed because they kept banging it.

I was playing the Kart Rider game, and it was good to meet Hyung-Dok, but I kept banging it and came out of the room. And then Moon Ho-Jun came out of the room and played the game, and I turned off the monitor and slept on the bed. In my dream, and Hyung-Dok and Moon Ho-joong were annoyed because they kept banging it.

I was playing Kart Rider and it was nice to meet Hyungwook. He came out of the room and he was playing games. He turned off the monitor and was sleeping. I had a nightmare.